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The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The three pie charts show the percentile for the number of
articles
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 from academic journals, read weekly by
PhD
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students
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, junior lecturers and all other
students
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 at an Australian University. It's pretty stunning to see the majority of those
students
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 pursuing the
PhD
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 program read more than 12
articles
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 per week in comparison to all other
students
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. The figures are 80
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percent
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 and 12, respectively.
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, only 5
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percent
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 of
PhD
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students
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 read between 1
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and
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 5
articles
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 and 15
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percent
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 read 6 to 11.
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, a large percentage of all other
students
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 (67 %) did the same amount of reading. Meanwhile, the junior lecturers of
75
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the 75
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 percentile read 6 to 11
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,
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the 25
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 percentile read more than 12 and remarkably only 1
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percent
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per cent
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 read 5 or
less
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fewer
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. It's indeed clear that
students
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 taking
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program
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programs
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 did
enormous
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an enormous
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 of reading as part of their research work
comparing
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compared
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 to either the junior lecturers or all other
students
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words articles, phd, students, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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