The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
There are two charts shown. The first chart compares the
portion
of
cultures
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culture
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and education spent government in 1995 and 2005, and the
second
one is about the number of participants
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in
Arts
Events in the same years.
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the first graph, there were 4 types of education and it can be clearly seen that there were significant changes in each category from 1995 to 2005. In the year 1995, music was the biggest
portion
than others and was almost
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half of the total parts. The following portions were visual
arts
and
theater
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theatre
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in which
theater
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was
slight
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different
of
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from
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its
portion
with visual
arts
.
Lastly
with
small
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a small
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slice was literature. In 2005,
however
, both
theater
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and music had
similar
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a similar
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portion
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portions
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, it was not more than
third-fourth
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a third-fourth
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each.
Moreover
, visual
arts
and literature had
similar
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the similar
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part
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parts
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and if both were calculated,
then
the total of portions would not similar
as
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to
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theater
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. Turning
at
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the
second
graph, there was a dramatic rise in all types of
arts
events (except visual
arts
). In fact, the highest number of people
joined
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particular
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a particular
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event was music in the
year
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years
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1995 and 2005, about 125,000 and 150,000 respectively. The
second
biggest one was
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the theater
a theater
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theater
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where in both years were just under 100,000. Visual
arts
and literature,
however
, were not over
than
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50,000
of
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participants. From 1995 to 2005, the total of participants decreased slightly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, second".
Vocabulary: Replace the words portion, arts, theater with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget allocation
  • noticeable rise
  • sharper increase
  • upward trend
  • distribution
  • participation rates
  • government funding
  • arts events
  • financial commitment
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