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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #sites #people #canada #summarise #features #comparisons
The graph shows how much social
network
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networks
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 is used by
the
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Canadian
people
 in 2014 and 2015. At the first
glance
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 we see that about a quarter of
people
 don't use these types of sites in both years, but most of 5o % of them have an account in
one
 or two different social,
in particular
 in 2014,36% of
people
have
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 an account in only
one
 site, but
this
 statistic in the
next
 year decrease in favour of multi-account percentage. In fact, it can be clearly seen that in 2014
people
 with 3 or more accounts is only
the
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19
percent
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,
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and
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five sites
has
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 a contribution of only the 2%, but in 2015 we see that the
people
subscribed
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who subscribed
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in
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to
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 3 sites at least become 28%.
Finally
, we can say that in
one
 year the spread of
multi-account
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the multi-account
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 percentage, make us
to
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provide an increase
of
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in
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utilisation
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the utilisation
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 of more than
one
 social network in the
next
 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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