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Some people argue that school is no longer necessary because children can obtain all of the information they need from the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the
Internet
 plays an integral role in our lives. Some people think that children can get a great deal of information from the
internet
 rather than going to
school
. I,
however
, disagree with
such
 belief because while learning through online the guidance of teachers will be missing and there will be less social interaction.
Firstly
, I would argue that why
school
 is the best place for learning and studying as there is the guidance of a teacher. It is true that in
school
 there are teachers who play a pivotal role to understand their children with some useful tips and tricks, whereas,
such
 thing is missing while learning through the
internet
 because there are only recorded videos that are not easily understood by many children.
For example
, a survey conducted by Harvard University found that 90% of
school
 children are smarter and intelligent in their studies than those children who are learning through the
internet
. Another reason why I disagree with
such
 perception is that children become less socialized if they learn through the
internet
.
This
 is because, when children go to
school
, they make friends, play and interact with them, which makes them extrovert and have many friends.
For instance
, in India, children who go to the schools found to have more friends and bold enough
instead
 of those who learn from being at home and learn online. In conclusion,
although
 some argue that going to
school
 is not important as the majority of information is available on the
internet
, I will not agree with them and argue that obtaining information or learning from
school
 not only does it help the children to have support and guidance from their teachers, but
also
 they become socialized person.
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