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Some people argue that school is no longer necessary because children can obtain all of the information they need from the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the
Internet
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 plays an integral role in our lives. Some people think that children can get a great deal of information from the
internet
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 rather than going to
school
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. I,
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, disagree with
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 belief because while learning through online the guidance of teachers will be missing and there will be less social interaction.
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, I would argue that why
school
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 is the best place for learning and studying as there is the guidance of a teacher. It is true that in
school
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 there are teachers who play a pivotal role to understand their children with some useful tips and tricks, whereas,
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 thing is missing while learning through the
internet
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 because there are only recorded videos that are not easily understood by many children.
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, a survey conducted by Harvard University found that 90% of
school
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 children are smarter and intelligent in their studies than those children who are learning through the
internet
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. Another reason why I disagree with
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 perception is that children become less socialized if they learn through the
internet
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.
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 is because, when children go to
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, they make friends, play and interact with them, which makes them extrovert and have many friends.
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, in India, children who go to the schools found to have more friends and bold enough
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 of those who learn from being at home and learn online. In conclusion,
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 some argue that going to
school
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 is not important as the majority of information is available on the
internet
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, I will not agree with them and argue that obtaining information or learning from
school
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 not only does it help the children to have support and guidance from their teachers, but
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 they become socialized person.
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