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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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The issue of
child
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 development has always triggered a debate concerning what a
child
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 should read
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 Many people believe that children should read only course books as reading books beyond the prescribed educational codes are just a waste of time
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This
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 of material
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broadens
 the horizons of a
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 as well as it helps in the cognitive development of mind thereby preparing them as a future global citizen. Reading plays a crucial role in stemming the future prospects of a
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's career. Reading
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variety
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a variety
 of material like international affairs
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 news, comics
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 novels etc. Helps the mind to think out of the box and move from conventional to contemporary approach
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 As per the statistics of council of educational research and training, New castle
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 87% of the students having
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an IQ level
 above 110 revealed that they read more than what is prescribed in textbooks. Multidimensional reading helps to develop creativity and perceptual skills as well it enhances the
child
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's understanding of any situation. A recent analysis of creative writing scores by Notre dam educational research institute on two schools reflects high scores of students who were given
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variety
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a variety
 of books to prepare for the writing task than the one given a course book for the same. The former
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students'
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 writings showed
diverse imagination contrary
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the diverse imaginations contrary
diverse imaginations contrary
 to the one with modest views. In conclusion
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 the positives of reading
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variety
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a variety
 of books outweighs the negatives
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Hence parents
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Hence, parents
 should encourage children to cultivate good reading habits of diverse material around the globe.
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