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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter: explain why you were at the restaurant describe the problems write about the action you want the manager to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to complain about your restaurant's service, which I experienced disrespected and awful
last
 weekend when I and my wife were there on our marriage anniversary day. As I mentioned we were there on our special day as my friends recommended your restaurant to have a special dinner with background music and an attractive location with a garden.
However
, I was very excited to bring my wife to have a lovely dinner but unfortunately, I had to stand out in a queue for an hour to book a table. And
therefore
, one of the waiters could not recognise that we were your customers so he neglected to serve a bottle of water unless he noticed after 30 minutes.
In addition
, the meal we ordered was vegetarian and had non-vegetarian kinds of stuff in it so my wife got terrified at me.
Hence
, I would like you to take strict action for
this
 kind of service to train the staff in a better way and improve the service so other customers do not feel the same as I had felt. Yours faithfully, Hardik Mehta
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea. Group sentences logically to enhance the flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The closing of your letter could be more personalized and directly address the manager rather than using a generic sign-off. This adds a touch of professionalism and respect to your writing.
task achievement
While you have completed the response to the task, you should elaborate more on the description of the problems by providing more details and expressing your feelings in a more structured way.
task achievement
Maintain a respectful and formal tone throughout the letter to suit the context of writing to a manager. This will convey your message more effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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