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The illiterate of the 21st century will not be those who cannot read and write, but those who cannot learn, unlearn and relearn. Agree or disagree?

#st #century #unlearn #relearn
Can you imagine the world without education in nowadays
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I think it would be difficult
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people would seem like animals
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One of the best process is learning something new
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We have to learn every day because everything is changing by the day.
Also we
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Also, we
 can find people without knowledge and we call them as an illiterate.
Even meaning
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The Even meaning
 of
this
 word changed as Alvin Toffler said the illiterate of the 21th century will not be those who cannot read or write
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but those who cannot learn
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unlearn and relearn
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I absolutely agree with
this
 statement, because everything
is enable
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enables
 to learn
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In addition
, the world changing
as
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at
 a speed of light
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It happened of course by virtue modern technology. By using modern things learning became really easy,
also
, it has effects on employment.
For instance
, if we do not know
definition
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the definition
a definition
 or
translation
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the translation
 of words, it is not
problem
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a problem
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we do not have to look up from
dictionary
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the dictionary
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we just click online translator and get our result. One more example, If we want to eat or we do not know how to cook, we can open YOU TUBE and look there we can find
collection
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a collection
 of receipts and master classes
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Instead
 of going to cooking courses. Learning by modern technology made one thing, it is
online shopping
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an online shopping
 and many malls
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stores require employers who familiar with internet knowledge
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However we
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However, we
 can meet people who cannot write and read, despite
this
 they want to learn new things
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These people can always survive in every situation by their talent or techniques. Here I want
give
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to give
 one example
from
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of
 school life. At school there students who know everything and who get
high grade
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high grades
a high grade
,
also
,
there
of them or themselves
their
 students who are not good at subjects
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The searches showed that these students who were not good at subjects have more probability being successful than
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
 students. It is right because that students who cannot study well
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they fail many times
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then
 learn to survive.
Also they
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Also, they
 learn to make good communication by cheating and so on. To sum up, I want to say education is
treasure
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a treasure
 which we can save forever. I
also
 think the person who cannot learn ready thing is real illiterate
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Never stop learning because It is never stops teaching.
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