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19. Some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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Intelligence
, as we know, is something many people would like to possess. Growing up, as children, we are constantly told that we need an education, so schools have become a competition of who can get the best grades. While
this
 pushes some of us to get good grades, it
also
 stresses those who do not. It is not fair to let children believe they are less intelligent just because their grades are not as high as their peers, because
intelligence
 entails so much more. Most of us assume that with
intelligence
 comes benefits
such
 as a good career, money, and bragging rights.
This
 is why people assign so much importance to it. There are hundreds of tests claiming to
test
 a person’s
intelligence
, and some are widely accepted as true. An example of a widely accepted
intelligence
test
 is an
Intelligence
 Quotient, better known as an IQ
test
.
This
test
 assigns a number to person, essentially measuring their intellect. It is human nature for us to want to be smart, but what exactly is
intelligence
? A majority of people would say that getting good grades, having a 4.0 grade point average, or passing difficult tests, compose an intelligent person. I fully disagree with
this
. I believe that
intelligence
 is made up of so much more than getting good grades in school, and that everyone’s
intelligence
 is unique. Some people are more receptive in certain subjects and some are less, but
this
 does not define a person’s
intelligence
. I believe that we all have certain academic subjects in which we are more receptive to, when learning. Some people do best at solving problems in math, while others may do best at
wri
Suggestion
better
ting poems and stories. Everyone has a different type of
intelligence
, which we learn the strongest in. A Dancer would most likely learn the best using her Musical and Bodily
Intelligence
 because she would be more in tune with rhythm,
and u
Suggestion
the rhythm
sing her body to complete activities. A Pilot would perhaps learn best using her spatial
intelligence
 because it strongly involves being able to identify and control the patterns of wide space. These careers are evidently different, and each of these people would learn differently because of it. Because of their great differences, it wouldn’t make sense to compare their intelligences to each other. Research has
also
 shown how beneficial incorporating the multiple
intelligence
 theory into schools could be, for the reason that student’s
intelligence
 strengths would be catered too…
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