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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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Nowadays it's hard to find a person on the earth who doesn't like
music
. Every country in the earth has its style or styles of
music
, but one thing is a fact,
music
 is in our lives and
this
 has happened since the dawn of time. Even our ancestors used to listen to
music
. The most popular
music
 in the worldwide today is from the US because everyone knows them. There are many reasons for listening to
music
. There are many reasons for listening to a song. We can listen to
music
 to learn a foreign language. We can use rock when we throw a party or celebrating something special.
Also
 couples listen to a romantic soul with the person whom they have a relationship. And many baby's songs help them sleep better. There are songs, even to help you when you are sad, or you need to relax a little. It doesn't matter the moment or occasion, if you look for, you can always find opera that matches your need. Today the traditional
music
 of homey is not more popular nor famous than the International
music
. It’s common for people to listen and enjoy the
music
 of another country.
For example
, is the
music
 from the US, which is the most popular
music
 market in the world. There are many singers who aren’t known in their own country, but when they release their songs in the US all the world knows them.
Music
 has the power to change our thoughts and feelings. Who never did listen to a song and immediately remember of one person? Or who never was sad and after listening to a piece of
music
 that enjoying feel better? I think it has become a habit for people to listen to
music
 in their daily lives while doing all the other things.
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