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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Although
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 tremendous developments made in
agriculture
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 and farming
technology
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, many people are still suffering or dying due to the hungry all over the world. The two most important steps that we can take to eradicate
starvation
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 are to provide easy access to
agriculture
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technology
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 from all around the world and to control the world
population
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.
First
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 and foremost, some countries, especially African countries, still unable to use productive agricultural land efficiently because of a lack of
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agriculture
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agricultural
technology
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.
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, Ethiopia has productive lands and a suitable climate, but many people, who live in Ethiopia, are fighting
starvation
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 due to undeveloped agricultural
technology
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. As a solution, knowledgeable farmers should be trained and give a chance to them access to new agricultural
technology
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.
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, in the
last
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 century, the Earth
population
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 increased dramatically and
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 increase brought many problems like
starvation
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.
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, countries like China, the
population
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 is not a burden rather they have been able to use the large
population
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 as the main workforce for the steady improvement of the country. As a solution, countries should either control their populations or use their populations correctly,
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 as china. To sum up, the main causes of
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are
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 lack of agricultural
technology
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 and overpopulation. I completely agree that the common solution to both problems is education. We should educate people either as a farmer who will be
agriculture
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 the right way or as a bureaucrat who will determine their
population
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 policies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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