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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Although
 tremendous developments made in
agriculture
 and farming
technology
, many people are still suffering or dying due to the hungry all over the world. The two most important steps that we can take to eradicate
starvation
 are to provide easy access to
agriculture
technology
 from all around the world and to control the world
population
.
First
 and foremost, some countries, especially African countries, still unable to use productive agricultural land efficiently because of a lack of
agriculture
Suggestion
agricultural
technology
.
For example
, Ethiopia has productive lands and a suitable climate, but many people, who live in Ethiopia, are fighting
starvation
 due to undeveloped agricultural
technology
. As a solution, knowledgeable farmers should be trained and give a chance to them access to new agricultural
technology
.
Secondly
, in the
last
 century, the Earth
population
 increased dramatically and
this
 increase brought many problems like
starvation
.
However
, countries like China, the
population
 is not a burden rather they have been able to use the large
population
 as the main workforce for the steady improvement of the country. As a solution, countries should either control their populations or use their populations correctly,
such
 as china. To sum up, the main causes of
starvation
are
introduces an alternative
or
 lack of agricultural
technology
 and overpopulation. I completely agree that the common solution to both problems is education. We should educate people either as a farmer who will be
agriculture
 the right way or as a bureaucrat who will determine their
population
 policies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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