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Some believe that because everyone needs a place to live, governments should provide houses for those who are too poor to afford their own. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the recent era, the masses are hardly able to meet their amenities. Fewer humans hold that the higher authorities should bless the below average income mankind with basic needs. I firmly stand by the given viewpoint. In my piece of writing, I shall shed light on the reasons of my agreement. More importantly, the government is a sole body which works for the welfare of the society, so it is included in the development of the living standard of the citizens. To illustrate, if the poor natives of any nation live in the slums
then
 the administration should set a package to inject them with the daily need accessories like cake, cottage and cloth. Apart from
this
, I think, the human beings
,
Accept space
,
who
live
have a great affection or liking for
love
 the below poverty line cannot unlock the door of purchasing or constructing
house
Suggestion
houses
, so the government can provide them some aids to build the houses. Apart from
this
, in the current recession period
,
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,
 the price level of the commodities is very high, and perhaps, the low revenue people cannot afford the renting cost of the living area.
For example
, with the
swear
a waste pipe that carries away sewage or surface water
sewer
 rate of the goods shift the mind compass of the masses to fulfil only daily needs and hire the houses, but it is very difficult to divide small part of the money in the multiple parts. The higher authorities should help the
comman
belonging to or participated in by a community as a whole; public
common
 man to buy
house
Suggestion
a house
the house
houses
. In my opinion, the government should contribute to uplift the living standard of the special categories
.
Accept space
.
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