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1. Today parents spend little free time with their children. Why is it the case? Who are most affected parents or children's?

#parents #time #children #case
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In the current scenario, parenthood
is very complex task
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is a very complex task
 for an individual. It seems that managing various
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work
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works
, careers and parenthood give nightmares to all the parents in the today's
time
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. Due to lack of
time
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, parents do not spend free
time
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 with their infants in their livelihood. They are pretty much busy with their
work
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life
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 and giving more importance to their career rather than spending
time
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 with family and children. Corporate offices and busy tight
schedules plays
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schedules, plays
 a vital role
situation
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 in creating
this
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situation
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.
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Therefore parents
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Therefore, parents
 are left with very little or no
time
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 to look after their
child
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. Parents do not have
time
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 to check whether their
child
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 is studying well or not or having any issues in their daily routine. They could not help them to provide solutions to
child
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 problems and how to cope up with
worst
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the worst situation
situation
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 in their
life
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.Due to
this
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 most of the teenagers or juveniles are consuming drugs and end up spoiling their precious lives. When it comes to raising a
child
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, parents are getting failed to shape up their
life
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 in
right direction
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the right direction
 or path. They are not maintaining a cordial relationship with their children. Due to
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, children's are scared to share things related to their personal
life
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 with their parents and
therefore
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 their issues are not getting resolved and
lastly
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 they need to live whole of their
life
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 in that tough
situation
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. In my opinion, both parents and children are affected due to lack of spending quality
time
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 together. Parents are losing their children trust and confidence
on
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in
 them due to their tight
work
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 commitments and end up spoiling their relationship with each other. In terms of
child
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 psychology is concerned, they are not achieving their goals in
life
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, in result they are getting pressurized to shape their careers and indulge in taking drugs and going into
shell
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a shell
. So parents need to maintain
work
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life
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 balance and spend some quality
time
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 with the children as well to help them in every aspect of
life
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.
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