Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is believed that children should be taught in schools how to play good role in
society
, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
think that parents should do
this
.
However
,
this
issue is not entirely straightforward, and
agruments
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
could be made against the idea.
This
essay will discuss both opinions and give a concluding view.
To begin
with, those who support the idea that schools should learn how children ought to
behaive
behave in a certain manner; show a certain behavior; conduct or comport oneself
behave
in
society
cite various aspects.
Firstly
, supporters
claim
Suggestion
claims
that children are the most time of their day at school and
communocate
transmit information
communicate
with other children and teachers.
Hence
, teachers should play a role model and explain why and how
child
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a child
the child
children
must be a member of
society
. Examples could be seen in Russia
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
in schools there are special lectures on which children are taught moral principles in
society
. According to opponents of
this
position they point out that parents must influence on their
childen
a young person of either sex
children
and educate how to be
good citizen
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good citizens
a good citizen
. It is considered that parents are responsible for
actions
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the actions
and behaviour of their children.
Furhtermore
in addition
Furthermore
, parents have more influence and respect than teachers among children.
Also before
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Also, before
entering at school children spend a lot of time with parents and being in pre-schooling and in-schooling
age they
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age, they
try to
obserb
become imbued
absorb
observe
all negative and positive
apects
a distinct feature or element in a problem
aspects
of behaviour in
society
.
Threfore in
Accept comma addition
Therefore, in
Therefore in
early stage
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the early stage
of life of
child
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children
a child
, without a doubt, parents ought to affect and direct how to be
good member
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a good member
good members
of
society
. Overall, it seems to me that school is a great place where children could obtain
knoweledge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
and practical skills to right act in
society
, but parents are the role model for children and
schould
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
teach them being
right person
Suggestion
the right person
in
society
.
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