the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The national consumer consumption in five different
countries
in 2002 has three different categories: Food, Drinks, and Tobacco, Clothing/Footwear, and Leisure/Education. The table shows the percentage of consumer spending in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey.
Firstly
, the European countries
aside from Ireland have low expenditure
ranging Fix the agreement mistake
expenditures
15
% to 18% in terms of the first category. Change preposition
from 15
This
shows that the customer spending in these three countries
is still manageable since the customer doesn't spend too much of their income compare
to the spending in Ireland, especially Spain. Change the form of the verb
compared
Hence
, the future economic growth in the two countries
that have high percentage
could be compromised because of insufficient savings and investment.
Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
Secondly
, Clothing
and Footwear expenditure Correct article usage
the Clothing
percentage
of Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
countries
aside from Italy are closely related to each other. On the other hand
, Italy have
Change the verb form
has
2.5
% to 3.5% difference between all of the nations. Correct article usage
a 2.5
As a result
, customer spending soars in this
category.
Thirdly
, Leisure
and Education expenditure of all the nations is closely related to each other. It is Correct article usage
the Leisure
not
Correct your spelling
no
Add an article
a dramatically
the dramatically
dramatically
high and low difference in each variable.
Change the word
dramatic
Therefore
, we can conclude that there's
Change the verb form
there are
perplexed
occasions happening here because Wrong verb form
perplexing
consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
spend
more on Food, Drinks, and Tobacco Change the verb form
spends
more
than Correct quantifier usage
apply
in
Change preposition
on
the
Leisure and Education.Correct article usage
apply
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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