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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other products from well-known brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, purchasing items
such
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 as cars or clothes from famous
brands
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 is becoming increasingly popular among a large number of people. The reasons behind
this
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 trend will be outlined in the following essay and, in my opinion, it could bring both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
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 large brand products mostly stems from people’s beliefs on personal possessions reflecting wealth, social status, and appearance. More specifically, many people associate clothes and accessories from popular brand names
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 as Nike or Adidas with
high quality
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 and fashionable designs.
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, these items are more suitable for enhancing people’s appearance than the products from smaller
brands
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.
In addition
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, some types of goods like cars from luxurious
brands
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 are usually sold at exorbitant prices because of their expensive materials or unique features.
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, these items are often considered
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a tool for the rich to show off their social status or their wealth.
On the other hand
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, more people purchasing goods from famous
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 can bring both merits and drawbacks to the business world. Countries where famous
brands
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 are based are more likely to have a strong and healthy economy.
For instance
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, the US - the home country of many large
brands
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,
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 as Apple and Microsoft, has been the strongest economic superpower since the late 20th century partly since the products of these enterprises are
favored
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 not only in domestic but
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 in foreign markets.
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, the rise of dominant brand names can be a factor leading to monopoly as large companies will attempt to dominate and
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 wipe out smaller rivals to maintain their positions. In conclusion, the tendency
of consuming
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 goods from famous
brands
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 largely comes from people’s perception of personal belongings showing their wealth, social status and appearance.
This
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 trend can bring both positive and harmful effects to the business market and,
therefore
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, should be well-considered by the government to prevent
large- scale
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 monopoly.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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