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Somw people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Recently, it is sometimes discussed by some people that educating boys and girls in single sex schools are more essential than attending in integrated schools.
This
 essay will argue that despite there being some social benefits to females and males going to the same
school
, the academic advantages of educating them
separately make it
Suggestion
separately to make it
 more worthwhile. Many feel that mixing both sexes at
school
 helps to develop social skills and makes people less awkward around the opposite sex later in life.
This
 is especially true for males, who often find it difficult to approach and talk to women
socially if
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socially, if
 they don’t get used to it
first
 in the classroom.
For example
, the BPS
researches
a scientist who devotes himself to doing research
researchers
 recently reported that men who did not have regular social contact with girls when they were growing up are 68% more likely to suffer from anxiety when in the company of females. Despite the argument above, it is difficult to argue with the fact that single-sex schools consistently top examination league tables. In nearly every area of the Indonesia, the top schools only allow boys or girls to attend and
this
 may lead to higher grades because students can focus exclusively on their studies, like Islamic boarding
school
 or Christian boarding
school
. Personally, I went to a
school
 for both boys and girls and found that I had to deal with many more distractions compared to friends who attended the local boys-only college. In conclusion, integrating the sexes can prevent social awkwardness later in life and make pupils more sociable in the company of other genders, but a
school
’s primary purpose is to educate and those with just one sex or the other outperform those that allow both.
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