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Because the modern technology, it is no longer necessary to learn handwriting skill, but others believe that handwriting is still an important skill. Discuss both and give your opinion based on your experience.

#technology #skill
In
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At
 the modern time, the technology of electronics significantly has been enhanced. So normally we use them when we have to write something. About
this
 situation, some people argue that we must not to forget the way to write by hand.
However
, In my view I think that to learn
this
 way is not
necessary no more
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necessary, no more
.
Hence
, in
this
 essay, I will discuss about these opinions and will suggest my opinion.
First
 of all, several people assume that handwriting skill is
very important still
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still very important
. They think that we must not be dependent on technology strongly and we have to improve our ability. But I do not agree with
this
 argument. I agree with the notion that the necessity of handwriting has been declined
passing
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to pass
 the time.
Firstly
, these days we use electronic devices when they want to contact
on
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with
 each other. So we talk with friends and family with
messanger
a person who carries a message
messenger
 app not
letter
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the letter
a letter
.
For example
, A survey
is stated
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has stated
states
 that 86% people use their
messange
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
message
messenger
messages
 or email when they contact with their acquaintances.
Therefore i
Accept comma addition
Therefore, I
Therefore I
 think that we have to adopt to the follow of generation.
Secondly
, the skill of the internet is frequently used when we make official documents or contracts.
In other words
, it means that documents
by
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from
 the computer have much more trust than the paper written by hand. Actually, according to a recent study, it shows that most of employees take the computer when they have to process
papers
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the papers
. To conclude, I believe that to learn handwriting skill is no longer necessary and we have to follow the development of electronics.
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