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Stress-related illness are becoming increasingly common.

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Under
this
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 fast-evolving world, people have to witness heavy pressure in their daily
life which
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life, which
 often leads to mental stress diseases. The primary reasons behind these diseases are unhealthy lifestyle and lack of exercise.
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 essay will
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 suggest the solution to deal with destructive living habits and perks of daily
work-out
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
workout
workouts
. A person is
lives
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living
 under constant competition and always gets tangled by his work. Nowadays, people are working for longer hours than before, and their routine is continuously
varying
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variable
. And because of
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 an odd living style, their physical fitness is drastically de-escalating. Uncontrollable consequences in their work-life may lead to suffering an employee from depression. Corporate people often give more importance to work rather than their personal life. Maintaining a prosperous routine, with a daily exercise session, is vividly essential. Annual research of the World health organization mentions a compulsive necessity eight hours of sleep, which can only be achieved by an organized time-table.
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, after following a BMI (Body mass index) suggested routine, astronaut Brine was able to work more efficiently than before.
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Therefore, to
 increase productivity, one should put a habit to divide the whole day systematically with regular
work-out
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
workouts
. Since 2000 a global issue has been evolving of mental stress diseases. Majorly it happens because of irregularity and less participation in physical activities. To overcome
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 an issue government should come up with strict norms that bring stability and spot in life.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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