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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#wealth #guaranty #happiness
This
 is a controversial issue nowadays. Some people think
money
 will not give us permanent happiness and some people think
money
 is everything. According to me,
money
 is important in everyone's
life
, but it is not everything. People have to know the value of
money
, and where it should be used properly. In my opinion,
money
 is the basic necessity in our daily
life
. We struggle whole
life
 to earn wealth to fill our stomach. The value of currency is known to the people who work on daily wages to feed their family. Some are born wealthy and some are grown wealthy. Both of them have same meaning called 'wealthy', but the difference is, people who born wealthy have their fore father's property, and grown rich means their parents earned enough
money
 to raise their kids.
However
, rich or poor, everyone has to know the basic ethics to greet people. The mentality of wealthy people will be completely wrong perspective. They think that, they can buy anything in
this
 world, but the sad truth is, how much rich you may be, we cannot buy happiness. From my experience, I have seen people who are rich and people who are poor. The difference I found in them is, the rich will always talk according to
money
, whereas the poor will talk from the heart. I am not sure everyone will be sending, but most of them are like
this
. There is famous saying ' An empty pocket teaches you the best lesson of
life
'.
This
 means that, the person who knows the hard work will know the value of
money
, and they are the people who respect it.
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