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some people think that is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. other, however , belive that they should be taught in mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It would be argued that It is more beneficial to send students to single-
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 schools. In my opinion,
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, I think that
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 should taught in mixed
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. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why male and female students tend to engage in single-
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preceding all others in time or space or degree
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, many parents want their children to concentrate more on studying to get high academic achievement,
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 boys and girls have to register learning in
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. In facts, whose often have less more early relationships when they study in separate
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 because they don’t have opportunities to interact with opposite
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 classmates, which help them pay more attention on their study to get high academic results without worrying about distraction.
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, boys and girls have different learning needs, it would be better if whose are educated separately.
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, male students are more likely to learn subjects that are more challenging like science or physics while female
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 often choose subjects that require imagination and creativity. Separate schools seem to a flexible option when these schools will prepare different teaching styles and learning programs for each other’s
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, In my opinion,
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the student
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 should be entered mix
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, there are several reasons for that.
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, boys and girls would develop more their imagination and creativity in mix
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 learn a wide range of skills through group work activities like team work skills, communication skills, with opposite
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 classmates, which help them have opportunities to explore each other perspective and develop team work skill for their job later.
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, mix
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 is an ideal environment to educate children about
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 equality and coexistence. In fact, A large number of women in many nations are discriminated and lose equal right in society.
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schools
 create a friendly environment to educate male
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students, students
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 on how to respect women’s, which bring many benefits for women and reducing the rate of violence against women. In conclusion,
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 some people believe that single
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the student
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, I personally think that mixed
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 is maximum environment to educate children due to the benefits that its bring to.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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