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despite advances in agriculture, many people in the world are still hungry. Why is this so? what are the likely solutions

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Despite improvement in agriculture, a lot of people all over the world still starve.
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analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 why
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 is so and propose a solution. Unarguably there has been a boost in agriculture in terms of technology and infrastructure,
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, many people are still hungry. A major culprit to
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 trend is shortage in food supply as demands
far exceeds
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far exceed
 supply; only a fraction of the populace embrace farming. How can the resulting produce feed the ever growing population? In a recent survey done by prof.
Marculey
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 N.
of
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Of
 Federal university of Technology Mina on involvement of Agricultural practices among
house holds
a social unit living together
households
 in the six geopolitical zones Nigeria, a shocking
out come
something that results
outcome
 of 21% did one farming method or the other. Little wonder why people still go hungry in recent times. Another cause of starvation is
persistent increase
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a persistent increase
 in industrialization as lands are no longer available for cultivation, resulting in to excessive use of existing farmlands. Traditional method of
fallowing
about to be mentioned or specified
following
allowing
 to improve soil quality is no longer practiced and
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, there is
poor harvest
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a poor harvest
 leading to food shortage and hunger. To curb
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 menace, the government at all levels must initiate and sustain a 'Live Green' initiative where every household should be encouraged to plant a tree and keep gardens. Financial grants
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 as loans should be accorded to young graduates to make farming attractive, while enormous lands should be allotted solely for agricultural purposes. In summary
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,
while inadequate food production resulting from lack of motivation and unavailability of farming spaces
are
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is
 the major cause of hunger, provision of financial support and allocation of land for agricultural purposes will cushion
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 effect.
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