More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

Nowadays, more and more people want to move away from rural areas to developing
city
. People think that prosperous
city
will lead to a better life, and they will not be in need
for
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of
money.
As a result
, rural areas stop in development because of the less quantity of
population
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the population
. In my opinion, governments should provide better
live
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living
conditions in order to maintain their own citizens. The relocation of the people from the agricultural backgrounds can lead to bad consequences.
For example
, the developing cities will become overcrowded. The
citie
the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)
site
city
suite
has their own population, but because of the rural people relocation cities become overpopulated. Another possible issue is that agriculture will suffer from the lack of people. The
remain
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remaining
remains
small population will not be enough for the proper care of the
agriulture
greater in size or importance or degree
greater
, and
this
will lead
for
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to
a stagnation of the agriculture. In my view, the
government
of the
city
ough
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
ought
to devote more time thinking of the
attractness
direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes
attracts
and maintenance of the people.
First
of all the
government
should
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
the wages of the rural people in order to avoid rural people's relocation.
Secondly
, the
government
should make some incentives for rural people, or even attract some people from the
city
. Governments can build some new schools or hospitals with new good equipment in order to have more working places for rural people. In conclusion, I think that the
government
can maintain people in rural areas with different methods and avoid overpopulation of the cities and stagnation of the agriculture
Submitted by Farah on

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