Some people hold that we should spend money and time on the protection of wild animals while others suggest that the money should be spent on populations living in the poorest areas of the world. What is your opinion

It is true that many people argue that people could waste
money
and time on protecting of animals. Meanwhile, some people believe that we should spend
money
on people who are poverty in the global. Personally, I agree with the
second
point. On the one hand, people who believe that we should spend
money
on protecting of animals base their opinion on several reasons.
Firstly
, protecting animals can help
to
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with
regulation of
environment
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the environment
.
For example
, animals eat each other to making recycling nature. If they are
died
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dying
, circulation nature would be broke.
Therefore
, it can lead to climate change.
Secondly
, animals can help to find kind of the medical in them.
For instance
, nowadays, experts use animals to test to find
medical
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medications
to treatment
such
as test vaccines
on
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in
mouses
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mice
.
On the other hand
, I believe that we should waste
money
on poverty people.
Firstly
, spending
money
for poor people can make a their living
.
Accept space
.
Government
spend
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spends
money
to build new houses to people who are
poorest
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poor
.
Therefore
, they can live a good condition and they can concentrate on working to
making
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make
money
.
Secondly
,
poorest people
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the poorest people
are labour and make country
develop
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developments
in
economy
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the economy
.
For example
, government can create
to
being one more than one
two
jobs for people by constructing companies
such
as
shoes
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shoe
companies or clothing companies. As the results, with
development economic
Accept comma addition
development, economic
,
country
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a country
the country
can take part in market
intergration
the action of incorporating a racial or religious group into a community
integration
in the world. In conclusion,
although
both views certainly have some vadility, it seems to me
that is
is better to spending monney to poverty people
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