only Money can bring happiness. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays

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people believe that

money

can bring happiness because with

money

a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number

many

people can

persue

carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in

pursue

parse

peruse

everything like

big house

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a big house

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car and even they can travel around the world

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However

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I strongly disagree with others

opinon

a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty

opinion

opinions

because there are many things and problems which

money

can not solve

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Firstly

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rich people may buy some things in their

live but

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lives, but

lives but

life but

they can not buy live of close people

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And there many times when rich people become

wealthy but

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wealthy, but

they lose their friends

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parents

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this

facts

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fact

show

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shows

that

money

is not the thing which can solve live problems

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Moreover

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there are many rich people who do not have children

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but they have time and they want to spend it with kids

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Secondly

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there are some people who do not have a lot of

money but

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money, but

they have close people who always try to support them

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For example

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they live in difficult

conditions but

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conditions, but

they never regret because

of close knit family

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of a close knit family

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Furthemore

in addition

Furthermore

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parents are happy as they have kids who will help them after

years so

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years, so

this

plural of "this"

these

people are more happier than rich people who do not have kids

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Some may argue that without

money

people can become happier than rich

people but

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people, but

close people are

predominat

most frequent or common

predominant

predominate

predominates

such

case

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conlusion

a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration

conclusion

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I believe that

money

is not

only thing

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the only thing

only things

wich

interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class

which

can bring happiness

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Because it is difficult imagine life without close people who can motivate and support even in complicated moments

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