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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #cost #fuel
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It is thought that
government
Suggestion
the government
 can avert environmental issues which put our world in jeopardy just by heightening the price of fossil
fuel
Use synonyms
.
Nevertheless
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, I think that it is only one of the most significant in the category and there are several reasonable alternatives. To commence with, one evident explanation why
higher cost
Suggestion
the higher cost
 of
fuel
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 is not the most effective method is somewhat related to policies and legislations of authorities.
In other words
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, they not only decrease the consumption of
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fuel but
Accept comma addition
fuel, but
also
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 foster dwellers to plant more trees, to utilize energy-effective items, to recycle and limit using plastic bags which act as a catalyst for alleviating our environment.
In addition
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, it is
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 to ban deforestation by virtue of the importance of trees and declining the square of forests at an alarming rate as well. On account of tackling
this
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 matter on a large scale, we need
do
Suggestion
to do
 a wide rage of tangible activities simultaneously. Another underlying factor to take under advisement is the efforts of residents. It is not indispensable to understand that obeying laws
plays
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play
 a crucial role.
That is
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 because office-bearers invest a fortune in technology devices, profound personnel and
experient
having experience; having knowledge or skill from observation or participation
experienced
experience
 scientists who take many years to seek major causes and solutions.
For example
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, in case farmers chop down trees to make way for farming or other their own purposes, regardless of
government’s
Suggestion
government
 regulations, protecting the environment will never be successfully mitigated. As a matter of fact, the cooperation between
office-holders
someone who is appointed or elected to an office and who holds a position of trust
officeholders
 and citizens makes essential contributions to prevent it from wrecking. In conclusion,
although
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 it is substantial to increase the cost of fossil
fuel
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, the other two aforementioned elements are more significant to carry out.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disproportionately affect
  • renewable sources
  • solar energy
  • equity in environmental policies
  • exacerbating social inequalities
  • incentivizing
  • subsidies
  • strict regulations
  • industrial emissions
  • sustainable local production
  • carbon footprints
  • punitive measures
  • sustainability efforts
  • robust and lasting changes
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