It is thought that music can bridge not only cultural gaps but also the differences in age. I strongly believe that it can bring people all over the world together, however it not a good option in terms of generation disparity. This essay will analyse several reasons to explain my idea.

It is thought that
music
can bridge not only cultural
gaps but
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gaps, but
also
the differences in age. I strongly believe that it can bring people all over the world together,
however it
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however, it's
however it's
not a good option in terms of
generation
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generational
disparity.
This
essay will analyse several reasons to explain my idea. To commence with, an evident explanation why
music
exacerbates in understanding between
two generations
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the two generations
is somewhat related to different tastes in
music
.
In other words
, almost the elderly are prone to prefer to listen intricate melodies, classical
music
and so on rather than electronic
music
or rap and vice versa for youngsters which in turns causes some challenges for them to deeper understanding each other
.
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.
In fact,
this
gap
can be widen
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can widen
through
music
due to the different style of modern its and personalities. Though
music
does little alleviate generation barriers, it does help cultures relate through the messages of
songs
Suggestion
the songs
. To be more detailed, by enjoying and watching
music
videos about particular countries, they can broaden their horizons about lifestyles of the local, the beauty of
its
the thing named or in question
it
, etc. A case in point is Hello Vietnam,
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
song, or Viet Nam
oi
refers to the speaker or writer
I
,
vietnamese
the Mon-Khmer language spoken in Vietnam
Vietnamese
song, which can help foreigners gain knowledge about a country in Asia with
magnificient
characterized by grandeur
magnificent
and poetic views, friendly and generous people and several distinctions which
Vienam
a communist state in Indochina on the South China Sea; achieved independence from France in 1945
Vietnam
just have. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
opine that people can be exposed to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
beautiful cultures in different parts of the world,
nevertherless
despite anything to the contrary (usually following a concession)
nevertheless
the gap between teenagers and elders can not be narrowed through
music
.
Submitted by Phạm Thị Hương Giang on

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