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Many people think that parents should teach children how to behave. Others think that school is the best place to learn this Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Being a good resident of the community is supposed to be really important and necessary. Many views agree that parents should take responsibility of teaching children to achieve
this
 aim, while others believe educational institutions are places to learn
this
. From my point of view, both parents and schools need to educate the teenagers about
this
 problem. There is no doubt to say that parents play an important role in forming a child’s personality and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Parents are thought to be the most closet people to the children so it is easier for them to teach the children how to behave well. At the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 development process, parents tend to spend most of their pastime with the children so they will understand deeply about their characters and teach them more easily.
Therefore
, children will respect their parents so they tend to follow their
instruction
Suggestion
instructions
 carefully.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 some reasons for those who believe school is responsible for telling pupils to have a good attitude and towards other people. Today, schools are likely to restrict the principles in order to control and improve a student’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. For that reason, students will imitate the good manner.
For example
, civic education is a really vital subject in Vietnamese schools which reflect many good personalities from some famous heroes in Viet Nam
such
 as Uncle Ho,…
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