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Individuals can do nothing to change society. Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions. How far do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of people in the world think that just governments and large institutions can make new developments to
change
society
.
This
 point of view in the world has a place be. Obviously,
society
 is a community of people
that is
 united by various criteria,
for instance
: by interest, by religion, by
politic
Suggestion
the politic
 and so on.
One
 is a large living organism that
itself
the thing named or in question
it
 changes over time.
One
 has developed over many centuries. Man is just a small detail in a large mechanism on which nothing depends. People create governments, states and huge institutions
to
Suggestion
change
change
 something. United we stand, divided we fall.
However
,
one
person
 can
change
 the course of history.
One
person
 can create a vaccine to save the world and
change
 the future.
One
 can prevent a terrorist attack and save many lives. The fate of an entire state and a million inhabitants depend on
one
 decision of
one
person
. A lot depends on
one
person
. The experience of
one
person
 can
change
 the understanding of
society
 in a particular issue. Governments are made up of people. Each individual is unique and brings something special to
society
.
For example
, the lives of a million people and their daily lifestyle depends on
one
 careless man who ate a bat. Due to
this
one
 the way of life has changed and familiar things like a walk in the fresh air were banned. So, people should be reasonable and understand that everyone affects
society
 and you need to think very well what to do. In conclusion, I think that not only departments and large institutions can
change
society
, but a
one
person
 too.
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