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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In our rapidly changing world, the introduction and development of social networking have always been the hottest issue that directly affects our daily lives. Whether these online applications
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 as Facebook, Instagram, Skype, etc.
may
the month following April and preceding June
May
 substitute for face-to-face communication, I believe that the benefits they bring may overshadow the drawbacks.
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 of all, it is undeniable that with the variety and availability of online platforms currently, an enormous number of people can access the internet easily for any purpose. People from all around the world can stay connected, update the latest information, and exchange information at any time and anywhere.
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, due to an outburst of COVID-19 recently, many people are expected to work from home via a technology device like a laptop.
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, social networking sites are so beneficial and help workers to complete the task without needing to.
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, despite a long-distance, parents can keep in touch with the children studying abroad thanks to technological innovation like a smartphone. At the same time, loving couples can nurture their love by calling and texting each other on Facebook, Skype in which distance plays a crucial part.
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, as many upcoming online platforms are about to introduce, people tend to rely excessively on the virtual world.
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, people are more likely to use a food delivery section on Grab to buy food
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 of buying fresh groceries and cooking on their own.
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, people are inclined to stay in their comfort zone rather than stepping out, socializing, and learning new skills. What is more dangerous is that people will be a lack of basic skills to survive, interact, and speak up under important circumstances like in a group discussion at school, at work meeting, a job interview, etc. In conclusion, social media can have a significant negative impact on society,
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, I consider that their advantages would exceed the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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