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Some people think it is always an advantage to buy local products. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are some locals who are always supportive to purchase local products, because they believe it is advantageous to the local area. In my own perspective, I think
this
 topic should be considered on both sides. On the one hand, people who strongly support local products declare that it can boost the economic growth of their cities. Take my hometown as an example, mango is produced there and large amount of local business is established for mango products,
such
 as food and drinks.
In addition
, the more local businesses are built up, the more job opportunities will be created,
hence
 more people can earn money and afford to live a better life.
On the other hand
, not all the products for people's basic needs might be produced in a local area,
therefore
 is has to import those products from somewhere else.
Additionally
, with the rapid globalization, there are plenty of benefits if a local city could welcome products from outside.
For instance
, when we purchase products imported from outside, those merchants are making contributions to the tax revenue and they would continue to recruit more local residents if their businesses are growing larger.
Moreover
, government can encourage locals to learn those technologies from outsiders and produce those new products by themselves. Different kinds of products or business can form a healthy competition, which is
also
 beneficial to stimulate the local economy. To conclude, buying local products is helpful to the local economy, whereas accepting more products from other areas is significant to boost the economic growth as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantage
  • local products
  • support
  • economy
  • carbon footprint
  • quality
  • freshness
  • cultural heritage
  • social connections
  • food safety
  • standards
  • sustainable
  • farming
  • production practices
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