Some people think that mobile phones are harmful for children while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Role
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The role
of mobile phones in
children
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children's
lives
are
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is
always a debatable topic, where some support the notion and other remain dissent. According to me judicious use under strict monitoring is always
make
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making
these gadgets a non replaceable asset in
child
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's life. On the one hand, some argue that gaming applications in smart phones not only waste their
time but
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time, but
also
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over time children become addictive to them. Through a survey it has proven that it
put
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puts
detrimental effect
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the detrimental effect
a detrimental effect
on
child
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health and mental well being.
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, games like PUBG making
younger generation aggressive
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the younger generation, aggressive
the younger generation aggressive
and solace for
surroundings
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the surroundings
.
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, they say that internet option in handy devices many times distract young minds from studies and lure them towards the dark web and growing
minds not
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minds, not
able to differentiate between good or bad and may get trapped in
wrong
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the wrong
does which spoil their future.
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, supporters argue that these gadgets has lessen the
child
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crime rate.
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,
WhatsApp live feature
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the WhatsApp live feature
has made parents monitor the track the present geographical location of young one's.
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, they say educational apps has
widen
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widened
the scope of learning horizons and made all the information available in pocket.
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to
this
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they
also
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feel that advanced feature like parental control and
child
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lock has made the
customisation
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possible and parents can check what a
child
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has
explore
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explored
in
device
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the device
.
This
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precise monitoring and full utilisation of technology has open new doors for learning for students. At
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I ponder that every advancements have two
facets it's
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facets, it's
upto
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up to
individual that which
face t one
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face at one
facet one
face tone
going to adopt and explore. I strongly believe that If mobile phones are used under strict monitoring
of
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by
parents and
teachers
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teachers, then
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these will
sure
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surely
act as
boon
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a boon
for children's safety and cognitive development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive screen time
  • health problems
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • disrupted sleep patterns
  • inappropriate content
  • addiction
  • reliance
  • impair
  • social skills
  • educational tools
  • digital literacy
  • mitigated
  • parental guidance
  • safeguards
  • responsible use
  • monitored
  • development
  • benefits
  • risks
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