The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.
One
of
example that we can use as a way to create make alternative energy is Change preposition
apply
Wave-energy
Correct article usage
a Wave-energy
machine
. This
machine
can help people create new resources for electricity. The process begin
with wave direction that Change the verb form
begins
naturally
on the ocean, Add a missing verb
is naturally
this
wave can get into the wave-energy machine
and on certain water levels, its
create Correct pronoun usage
it
air flow
that can operate the turbine. On the top of Correct your spelling
airflow
this
machine
also
air flow come
inside Change the verb form
comes
this
machine
. These two air flow
can make the turbine Fix the agreement mistake
flows
spins
and make Fix the agreement mistake
spin
electricity
generator can produce the electricity.
For Correct article usage
the electricity
location
Add a comma
,location
this
wave-energy machines can you place depends on the number Correct determiner usage
these
waves
and Change preposition
of waves
impact
Correct article usage
the impact
to
the Change preposition
on
number of
output they can produce. Correct quantifier usage
apply
However
, more
deeper the oceans to get large waves that can bring you Change the word
apply
high
output, the installation costs will be high and vice versa.Add an article
a high
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