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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.
#diagrams #show #design #wave-energy #machine #location
One
of
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example that we can use as a way to create make alternative energy is
Wave-energy
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a Wave-energy
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machine
.
This
machine
 can help people create new resources for electricity. The process
begin
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 with wave direction that
naturally
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 on the ocean,
this
 wave can get into the wave-energy
machine
 and on certain water levels,
its
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it
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 create
air flow
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airflow
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 that can operate the turbine. On the top of
this
machine
also
 air flow
come
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 inside
this
machine
. These two air
flow
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flows
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 can make the turbine
spins
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 and make
electricity
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the electricity
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 generator can produce the electricity. For
location
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this
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these
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 wave-energy machines can you place depends on the number
waves
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of waves
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 and
impact
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to
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 the
number of
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apply
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output they can produce.
However
,
more
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deeper the oceans to get large waves that can bring you
high
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a high
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 output, the installation costs will be high and vice versa.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 4 times.
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