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Going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in a different culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Many people prefer to go overseas to
study
, as they believe it will be a good opportunity for them to explore
different culture
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different cultures
a different culture
 and learn a foreign
language
. Studying abroad not only provides
them with ample of
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them with ample
 job
opportunities but
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opportunities, but
also
 offers a new and different perspective of the world. At the same time, studying in a foreign country can be a frustrating and painful experience.
This
 essay will start by examining why some people prefer to
study
 abroad and others prefer to be in their home country and end by examining my opinion on both the
view-points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
viewpoint
. The most obvious advantage to
study
 in an overseas university is the real life use of a foreign
language
. While a person can
study
 a foreign
language
 in their own home country, but it cannot be compared with the
continuous
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continued
 use of
language
 in their academic and everyday life.
Also it
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Also, it
 is possible for students to encounter other students from overseas location and it is helpful for a student both on a social level and professional level. Though, studying abroad broadens one’s perspectives towards the
world there
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world, there
 are some people who hold the opinion that it is better to stay home because in some countries the living and education expenses are too high.
Also
, the students have to take care of the personal activities like washing and
cleaning which
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cleaning, which
 develops a frustration level and causes Stress and strain. In my opinion, student’s anxiety about studying abroad is totally
understandable but
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understandable, but
 at the same time it is important to remember the advantages offered by the experience to
study
 abroad makes it worthwhile.
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