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While some sports are typically played in teams, others are usually done by individuals. There are, of course, benefits to both team sports and individual ones, and this essay will explore both, before coming to the conclusion that team sports are slightly more beneficial.

Many people argue that sports should be played individually while others say it should be in teams.
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 that
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 sports are slightly advantageous than individual sports. Individual sports help in the physiological and mental development of
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the body
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 Vishwanathan Anand
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the famous chess player reveals that he had been practicing chess all alone since his childhood
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which gave him an expertise to play it
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 admits the fact that playing sport has always kept his spirit high to fight the problems in life and be a winner. Contrary to Individual sports
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 sport has benefits of its own
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 football all the other players cover the main spinner to reach the goal.
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 sports are a great success all around the world because of its coordination
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 In conclusion
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 both the sports
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 or individual are beneficial for the health and should be played.
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 sports are more profitable as it teaches many life skills.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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