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Nowadays experience is more valued in workplace than knowledge in many countries

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Introduction
In the present, employee’s work experience is getting more and more required for the employers for certain. Communicating skills and being able to work out challenging problems are seemed to be more important nowadays.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, one of the distinct benefits of that strategy is that it is more affordable for the students. Due to that they decide to have a gap year after finishing school in order to get
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 a valuable experience so the majority starts working as a waiter which is definitely less harmful for their budget than studying at university for the degree.
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-experienced workers are easier to control and quicker to study.
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, declining numbers of professionals in workplaces are ensuing. Which perniciously affect at customer’s satisfaction. In view of the lack of the education workers are not able to get out of the trouble and provide services correctly. Personally, it is a really significant drawback. Another disadvantage is that students which got a degree are usually refused in getting the desired job in terms of an insufficient level of life-skills.
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, they have been already learned how to deal with different types of obstacles and doing their job professionally.
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, in my opinion, we couldn't discuss experience and knowledges separately. Those aspects are needed and they are crucial as well. So every applicant should have a balance of mentioned features.
Conclusion
To conclude, I hold the view that without basic education you are not being hired on well-paid job and along with that you are not be able to climb the career ladder. Obviously, the drawbacks outweigh advantages.

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