your local hospital has advertised for people to do some unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. in your letter - explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital -Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do -give details of when you would be available for this work

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the

advertisment

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which was made by the hospital about requiring volunteers to do

somework

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some work

which I would like to participate in. I am going to

calrify

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clarify

my reason

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for

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participating, the type of

work

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that I can do and the

timmings

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timings

trimmings

I can

work

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in. The reason

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for

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my desire to share in volunteering is, at the time being, we need to overcome

this

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pandemic outbreak we have faced all over the world which has caused

shortage

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of the human factor who are working at the hospitals as well as the material factor of the whole health system so, we need to support at least the human factor by

oursleves

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ourselves

. Regarding the type of

workI

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work

work I

will be able to do, they are

accountaing

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accounting

and

admisintartion

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administration

stuff as I have studied these fields and I worked as an accountant and

administratvie

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administrative

assistant before.

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to that, I used to give

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-aid to my

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colleagues

in the

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team since it was mandatory to get the

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-aid course. I am not aware

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these are enough or not but

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just wanted to inform you about all the

work

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types I can do. With regard to the timings, I will be available

everyday

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from 5:00 Pm to 8:00 Pm. Please inform me if it is suitable for you or not and if it is not, we will arrange it together. To sum up, I am felxible to get any training if it is needed

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I can reschedule my

work

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timing. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Alaa Mostafa

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

272 words

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