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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Settling a new life in
foreign country
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a foreign country
 is a common phenomenon.
However
, it’s argued that those who live in new countries should adopt the local traditions and customs. I partly agree with
this
idea but
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idea, but
 it’s unreasonable to force people into a new way of living. On one hand, adapting to new customs where people move to is perfectly understandable and to some extent, necessary. It’s important that foreigners acknowledge the basic customs and social norms in their current residence in order to avoid certain problems. To illustrate, in Korea, they have a complex system of vocative particles to help the speakers address their level of intimacy as well as their social position. If you move to the country and don’t know these rituals, your words may be considered as harassment by the locals and you may end up unemployed. In some worst cases, people can even break the law by being completely unaware of some traditions in their new living places.
On the other hand
, adjusting into a new way of living does not mean that people have to give up their tradition. We are living in the age of globalization, that means each individual has to embrace their own culture, their national pride in order to spread the world the beauty of each and every land, every nation on Earth. Globalization is not only about emerging into the international flow, it is
also
 about embracing your own identity. Only when the two parts are balanced can we advance the connection between people among the community. To conclude, it’s obvious to
say no
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say, no
 matter who you are and no matter where you choose to settle down, you should have the balance between understanding, adapting
with
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to
 the new culture, and embracing, conserving your own history.
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