Some people think that school have to be more entertaining while others think that their sold purpose to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific resons and examples to support your opinion

In
Suggestion
On
During
this
day more and more the
school
has extracurricular activities to be more entertaining. And
this
opinion has my support is
school
have to be more entertaining.
This
is a wide array of
resons
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
. Fist
resons
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
, is after a stressful studying day student need to be entertaining. Because it can help
they
objective case of they
them
reduce stress, no more pressure. They
will don't be
Suggestion
won't be
will not be
afraid to go to
school
. And
second
resons
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
reason
it will making inspiration for student they can study hard, working hard, develop many skills
such
as:
commnication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
skills, dance skills, sing skills...
for
Suggestion
For
example:
stundent
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
student
can find some talent, they can be better with talent.
Last
resons
,
school
should have to be more entertaining to
ceate
make or cause to be or to become
create
a better learning
enironment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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