Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes in some countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that overeating causing many health problems as smoking cigarettes.

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, many people view that food advertisements should be forbidden like tobacco advertisements. From my perspective, I completely disagree with

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viewpoint. On the one hand, there are several drawbacks of

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of all, customers are likely to limit information. To be more specific, without advertising, people are hard to access useful information promoted via TV, newspaper or social network.

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, they are less chances to not only opt products, but

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enhance their knowledge about nutrition and avoid harmful goods.

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, being a burden to the people.

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is because the opportunities of citizens will be lost if advertising disappear and leads to their income will reduce.

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, inhabitant’ life will face many difficulties, obstacles and challenges if they are insufficient money to make ends meet.

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, out of control in eating provoke many concerns of modern society.

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is because of stress or gene.

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, people can prone to obesity by overeating.

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, they should put the list of a good diet as well as lifestyle,

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as doing physical exercise, consuming fresh vegetables and limiting junk foods which contain loads of sugar. In conclusion, overeating trigger harmful effects on peoples’ health so we have to be a good diet and lifestyle as well

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of banning food goods advertisements as smoking.

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Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes in some countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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The only way to improve road safety is to have stricter punishments for driving offenders.

Describe current technology used in schools. What technology is most important in the classroom? Explain with details and examples.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.