Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes in some countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable that overeating causing many health problems as smoking cigarettes.
Therefore
, many people view that food advertisements should be forbidden like tobacco advertisements. From my perspective, I completely disagree with
this
viewpoint. On the one hand, there are several drawbacks of
this
trend.
First
of all, customers are likely to limit information. To be more specific, without advertising, people are hard to access useful information promoted via TV, newspaper or social network.
As a result
, they are less chances to not only opt products, but
also
enhance their knowledge about nutrition and avoid harmful goods.
Furthermore
, being a burden to the people.
This
is because the opportunities of citizens will be lost if advertising disappear and leads to their income will reduce.
Consequently
, inhabitant’ life will face many difficulties, obstacles and challenges if they are insufficient money to make ends meet.
On the other hand
, out of control in eating provoke many concerns of modern society.
This
is because of stress or gene.
In addition
, people can prone to obesity by overeating.
Thus
, they should put the list of a good diet as well as lifestyle,
suchsuch
Suggestion
such such
as doing physical exercise, consuming fresh vegetables and limiting junk foods which contain loads of sugar. In conclusion, overeating trigger harmful effects on peoples’ health so we have to be a good diet and lifestyle as well
instead
of banning food goods advertisements as smoking.
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