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Government Schools. As we
are living
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were living
 in the 20th century and the most important thing in the same era is
education
. Being a human,
education
 is necessary for everyone to survive properly in every aspect of life. The reason behind its necessity is, it's the only thing which
cross
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crosses
 the line between hard workers and smart workers. That's why
Education
 is the basic and necessary requirement for everyone. We belong to the developing country, named Pakistan, located in Asia. In my
country the
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country, the
 entire population is not as rich as of developing countries.
This
 is the main reason behind the need of public schools those can provide free and valuable
education
 for aspirants and deserving students, even though
government
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the government
 is not focusing on
this
 main matter. In my notions, if they can feed our nation with the quality
education
 for free in public
schools
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schools, then
then
 we can easily overcome our major
issues even
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issues, even
 just in
decade
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the decade
 that we
are facing
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have faced
 since the independence. Ironically, our officials never took remarkable steps which can give fruitful outcomes.
Contrary
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Contrarily
, they didn't set enough budget for the same just because it's not their foremost priority for us. We need a prestigious platform that can give us satisfactorily
education
 for no cost in
form
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the form
 of government schools. Prime Minister should start a new project for the development of public schools in all
province
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provinces
 because each province is
subsidiary
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a subsidiary
 of PM, and he must run the project by himself to complete it. To be
conclude
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concluded
, we must promote quality
education
 by mean of government schools to make
education
 common for each locals. That's how we can make fabulous victories in every
institutions
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institution
.
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