In many countries women no longer feel need to get married some people believe that this own income and therefore don’t require the financial security marriage can bring

#countries #women #people #income #don’t #security #marriage

In many

countries women

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countries, women

no longer tend to get married some people believe

that is

because women becoming more self sufficient

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am partly agree

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partly agree

have partly agreed

with

this

statement but

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statement, but

there are some reasons for reluctance The

first

and foremost

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most of women don't get married are well educated

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They have qualifications up to degree

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They have higher employment levels

also

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And they earn money

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for

themselves in order to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

their all needs

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all their needs

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taking responsibility for financial aids on their own shoulders

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Moreover women

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Moreover, women

who

don't married

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don't marry

because of losing their freedom

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Before

marriage there

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marriage, there

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are

have been

no restrictions to women to do whatever they like and don't have any duties. But after

marriage

most of

ladies

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the ladies

have to follow the norms of another family

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Sometimes it may be quite challenging problems with pressure of duties

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On the opposite side,

marriage

is a wonderful relationship which

create

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creates

between two souls.Both husband and wife have to share their emotions and have to support each other with financially and socially

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Every person in

world

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the world

cannot live without deal with their relationships

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Therefore bonds

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Therefore, bonds

play vital role in human lives

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In conclusion

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nowadays women

has been reaching

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have been reaching

were reaching

have reached

a peak of glory in their life

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Also

get hundreds of opportunities for their financial needs

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So ladies avoid getting married

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But I believe

marriage

should be like a precious diamond.

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In many countries women no longer feel need to get married some people believe that this own income and therefore don’t require the financial security marriage can bring

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

People have different jo exception for jobs. Some people prefer to do same job for same company, whereas other prefer to change jobs frequently. Write advantages and disadvantages of each view point.

Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of the school subjects. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

some people opine that students are the best evaluator of teachers performance while other say that there are other ways to evaluate teachers performance. what is your view point. give reason and support yourself with example.

Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?