The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts of a survey show the most common pros and cons of visiting Bowen
island
according to
visitors.
Overall
, the high cost of living is the foremost demerit of visiting Bowen
Island
.
In contrast
, most of them feel that the parishioners are affable. All things contemplated,
people
felt that culture, housing, terrain and the
people
are the primary advantages of the
Island
.
On the other hand
, bad weather, high cost of living, entertainment and food are major disadvantages of visiting the
island
. Forty-two
percent
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per cent
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of the
people
said they like the generosity and hospitality of the
Island
. Around one-
third
of the
people
who completed the survey said that the scenery of the
Island
was breathtaking. Visitors felt that culture was slightly better than the accommodation at 12% and 11% respectively. Half of the
people
who concluded the survey agreed that the high cost of living is the primary drawback of the
island
, followed by a quarter of participants
said
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who said
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that the
Island
has entertainment complications.
Subsequently
, 15% of the respondents felt that the
Island
has bad weather.
Finally
,
one tenth
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one-tenth
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of the participants had food problems
in
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on
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the
Island
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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