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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is one of the main problems that face all the world not only in recent years but all ages. Now I will discuss the major reasons that lead to famine. Significant increasing in population, from only 200 years ago around the world were 400 to 500 million one stay in the earth but we are now 7.3 billion one stay on the earth. A significant increasing and not create or discover innovative solutions that lead to many famines specially on developing country like in Africa. Global warming has a serious impact on the green soil that convert into
sandy
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the sandy ground
ground
. Spreading of wars in some regions and using comprehensive destruction weapons has a negative effect on green
ground
. Water leak is considered the main reason that leads to loss of green
ground
. Raising the oceans and seas levels share in increasing
ground
 salt percent that affect on the performance of
ground
. Lack of reclamation of desert
ground
 and increase politician conflicts between different nations makes them focus their efforts on weapons industry and manufacturing and ignore the important problem like that problem that threaten
life
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the life
 of a billion people around the world. It is undeniable fact that developed countries seek to control to developing country without helping them to face like that problems and we have many examples in Africa. From above discussion, If we concentrate our efforts and researches to find solutions and innovative ways of agriculture, It will contribute to save lives for many people that suffer from hungry daily.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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