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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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While some people believe in inborn talents, others claimed that every child could successful in any field
such
 as sport or music by his efforts. In
this
 essay, both views will be discussed and it will be concluded with my opinion. On the one hand, natural talent is considered as the main reason for children to become skilful in a profession or career.
This
 belief stems from the fact that every practical subject needs some qualifications.
For instance
, most successful volleyball players are taller than average, which is mostly their height is inherited, and painters have a strong imaginative mind
that is
 an inborn talent.
On the other hand
, some people asserted that human efforts are the key factor of one success.
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