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Some people argue that if children behave badly their parent should accept responsibility and also be punished for the behavior of their children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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It has been argued by
certain conservatist
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a certain conservatism
certain conservatism
 that for the mischief in the adolescence period,
parent
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parents
a parent
the parent
 should be held responsible and penalize for
this
.
This
 essay completely disagrees with
this
,
firstly
, children learns many stuffs from
outside world
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the outside world
 which
is in beyond the
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is beyond the
 control of parent’s,
secondly
 children are very innocent and fragile.
Study
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The study
 shows that children
spends
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spend
ample number
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an ample number
 of hours in schools, park where they interact with other offspring of their age and learn about their habits. They find it quite interesting what other children of their age do and try to replicate the same. Father and mother cannot be punished for the
trouble performed
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trouble, performed
 by them as it is part of their journey to life which
mold
produced by a manufacturing process
made
mould
moved
 them into
better person
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a better person
 in future. Juvenile are very tender and innocent; they are unable to identify what is wrong and right. With time
passes
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passing
 by and as they are growing, they cannot differentiate themselves what is incorrect and stop doing
mischief
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mischievous
 activities. It is the parent’s responsibility to guide them during
this
path but
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path, but
 punishing parent is totally an act of inhuman as no parent’s want their child to behave differently and be
trouble some
difficult to deal with
troublesome
 to other. With the above points I conclude that parents want their child to learn, grow up as a better human being but in the course of learning if they are performing any mischief parents cannot be punished. Adolescence age is very critical and tender, children themselves acquire behaviours and knowledge and turn into a better individual.
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