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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country’s success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country’s success. What are those factors? Which, of all factors, do you think are most important?

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It is considered by some that the economic rate of a
country
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 is the best way to access its prosperity,
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, others think that there are many other factors which determine how prosperous the
country
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 is, some of the factors other than economy are, the
health
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care
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, educational system, and,
quality
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 of
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 index.
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, a good economy is must, but is not the only factor to measure the prosperity of a nation. The
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, educational system and
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 of
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 keeps a place ahead of others. The educational system helps to provide a big boost to the
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 as it provides a platform to the citizens of a place as well as invites foreign students, which in fact contributes towards the growth of a place.
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, The United States of America being one
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country
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 that has highly benefited from the student influx as they
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 contributes towards their growth. Another being the
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care
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 maintains better
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 prospects by updating vaccinations and immediate cure with the latest technology and well-educated doctors. In my opinion, I believe that the
quality
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 of
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 is the most important for a successful
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, as it involves all other systems,
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 as education, well-being, and work environments as a job. The
quality
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 of
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 index measures, how to prosper the people are and are happy with their
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, which starts from housing to utilities and rests of the factors. In conclusion, along with economic growth,
quality
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 of
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,
health
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care
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, and education are the other factors that make a
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country successful
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successful country
. The
quality
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 of
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 index is the most important among them as it gives the idea of a
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’s success rate among its people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • holistic approach
  • subjective well-being
  • quality of life
  • human development index (HDI)
  • green economy
  • technological prowess
  • social cohesion
  • equality and equity
  • cultural vitality
  • political transparency
  • judicial efficacy
  • civil liberties
  • progress indicators
  • societal prosperity
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