You stayed with a local family when you participated in an exchange program in lreland. You returned to your home country in a hurry and found that you had forgotten to take your laptop. Writea letter to the family and thank them for their hospitality. Describe your computer and where it is,and ask the host to send it back to you.
Dear Johan,
I hope
this
letter finds you in good health and in the best of spirits. I am writing this
letter to thank you for making my stay comfortable in Ireland. I have reached safely, unfortunately, I left my laptop in the drawer of my room.
I think the computer
must be in the left side drawer of my bed. It is a black coloured laptop from Dell company. This
laptop is relentlessly vital for me as I have stored all my official details in it. I need to travel back urgently due to
some personal reasons and I realised halfway through that forgot to carry my computer
with me.
I would be obliged if you could parcel my personal computer
to my home address as soon as possible for you. I require it urgently, I will try to manage it for a few days by using my email address on my parent's computer
.
I appreciate your help.
Yours sincerely,
Navneet Kaur.Submitted by ss6802125 on
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, consider linking your ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. Use connecting words like 'moreover' or 'in addition' to make your letter flow better.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the urgency of your need for the laptop to make the task response stronger. This would help the reader fully understand your situation.
task achievement
The letter has a polite and appropriate tone, which is suitable for the context and audience.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are handled well, reflecting good letter-writing conventions.