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Nowadays it is common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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In today's
society
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, younger
generetions
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generations
generation
 seem to get married and have children when they are around thirty years old.
This
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 trend leads to the question
wheter
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whether
 it is beneficial to the
society
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. I do agree that
this
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 trend would benefit
society
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 for two main reasons.
generally
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Generally
, people with an age thirty have stable jobs to take care themselves and raise a child without bothering others for financial help. Most adults these days have collected money and got promoted with higher salary before thirty.
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then
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Then
 they may possibly start thinking about having a family as it has to come with huge responsibility. More importantly, these people have enough maturity and more experienced to
raised
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raise
 their children effectively. When these children have seen good examples from their parents, they
tend
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will tend
 to be a good
adults
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adult
 in the future.
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, they will not create problems
such
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 as, drugs or violence
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in
 the
society
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 as they grew up in a good surroundings that their parents created and gave them lessons. To conclude,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic stability
  • financial security
  • mature decision making
  • life goals
  • child welfare
  • emotionally equipped
  • population growth control
  • resource management
  • environmental sustainability
  • changing social norms
  • traditional timelines
  • personal freedom
  • social diversity
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