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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disaster. Do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #relief #disaster
Natural calamities are unpredictable and it has huge impact on any nation. I strongly believe that rich countries should help others during
such
 crises because they have
social obligation
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a social obligation
 to do so and to reduce the impact on the global
economy
. During
time
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times
a time
 of natural disaster, countries with poor
economy
 are the
first
 ones which are hit worst. Do to the lack of sufficient funds, it becomes difficult for
such
 countries to overcome the consequences of a disaster. They struggle to take care of
basic needs
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the basic needs
 of their people. During
such
 times,
only option
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the only option
 for them to get help from other nations who are rich and least affected.
This
 social
gesture not
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gesture, not
 only gives them
hope but
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hope, but
 a helping hand to handle
this
 situation better and unites them together.
Global
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The global economy
economy
is
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is also getting
also gets
has also gotten
has also got
also
 get affected by natural calamities. The gap between rich and poor countries start to increase more. Sometimes,
this
 gap is much more that
poorer countries struggle
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the poorer countries struggle
 for years to revive back to normal.
For example
, during the COVID-19 pandemic almost every
country
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country's
countries
economy
 was impacted not only just the poorer ones. To stabilize
economy
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the economy
 across countries, WHO start helping the ones which are most impacted and provided them a relief package to support their
economy
. To conclude, some argue that it is the job of individual countries to support their citizens. I believe in
such
 times everyone should work together to come out of
such
 a calamity.
This
 should be a social responsibility of each country and
also
 it
keep
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keeps
 them united.
Submitted by Rajan on

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