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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems To whatextent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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The
language
 barrier is one of the biggest social, practical challenges for people who decided to live in a foreign country or abroad. Owing to their issue of non knowing a foreign
language
 sometimes many people find it hard to fit in.
This
 can lead to mortifying well being and there is no contradiction that humans living abroad without knowing the
language
 are the worst sufferers from
language
 barriers. There is no doubt that
language
 is the
first
 and main issue that an immigrant encounters in the foreign land. Not being able to communicate with natives can have an impact to socialising, chatting and making friends.
This
 little problem can lead to bigger than before while getting medical help or asking for directions, do shopping. It can be challenging for individual who has not base of native
language
.
Moreover
,
this
 all problems could be overcome by learning
language
 or by using social networks.
In addition
, poor verbal communication in the foreign
language
 may be the main cause of unemployment among immigrants. As, you can not be able to introduce yourself, by the why talk to your customers.
Also
, illiteracy and
language
 misunderstanding may lead to mental health problems like a depression.
Therefore
language
 plays a crucial part in facilitating a person's integration into a new environment. Gathering all into account, in order to adapt to a new environment well, to overcome problems, immigrants should be able to chat well in the local
language
 abroad. The main upshot of big issues, in my opinion may be a little effort to learning or easily using nets and gadgets, as well.
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